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[edit] Mismatching lyrics

Most of the lyrics match up pretty well with their English counterparts (in terms of semantics, anyway), but these are just strange. I'm not fluent in French, so I don't know the best way to correct these, but they really should be addressed.

<line start="58" end="85" speaker="pbtccoachz">Puis-je vous emprunter de la lessive, s'il vous plait ?</line>

Translation: "Can I borrow some landry from you, please?"
Should be: "Can I borrow some detergent from you, please?"
Borrowing detergent is an interaction that isn't too far-fetched to ask someone in a laundromat, but borrowing landry?

tronche de cake (appears throughout)
Translation: The translation that most resembles a H*R phrase would be "butt-face".
Should be: "Biscuit-head".
Not awful in that the phrase is used correctly to make fun of Coach Z (or anyone else Peacey P is referring to), but the joke is that it isn't a real pejorative term.

<line start="505" end="536" speaker="coachz">J'aime prendre mes vacances sous les tropiques,</line>

Translation: "I like my vacations tropical, mostly"
Should be: "I like my ointments topical, mostly"
Don't get me wrong. When I first heard the song I thought that he was talking about liking his vacations tropical, but it's been seven years since the music video came out and the transcript has been correct for a while.

<line start="698" end="728" speaker="peaceyp">Je sais même pas quelle est cette musique !</line>

Translation: "I ain't even know what music this is!"
Should be: "I ain't even know whose song this is!"
Peacey P should know what a rap song is since he's the self-proclaimed best guest rapper in the business.

<line start="882" end="918">
   <coachz>Coach Z et Peacey P cool rappity-rap !</coachz>
   <peaceyp>Coach Z et Peacey P cool rappity-rap !</peaceyp>

(translation obvious)
Should be: "Coach Z and Peacey P cold rappity-rap!"
Again, this ruins the joke. "Cool" has a different connotation than "cold", but sounds similar and can have the same meaning if necessary. The same is not true in French, but the visual image of "cold rappity-rap" appears on the screen, so actually saying "frigid" makes more sense than "cool".

<line start="981" end="1005" speaker="peaceyp">Arrête, mec, tu copie mon style !</line>

Translation: "Stop, fool, you're copying my style!"
Should be: "Stop, fool, you're cramping my style!"
Copying one's style and cramping one's style are quite different. Coach Z couldn't hope to copy Peacey P's style if he tried... so he does something totally different, by instead relating rhymes to mopping. That cramps Peacey P's style (diminishing it).

<line start="1006" end="1042" speaker="coachz">J'vais défoncer la musique avec mon tas de saletés !</line>

Translation: "I'll smash up the music with my dirty pile!"
Should be: "I'll sprinkle wack MC's with my sawdust pile!"
I don't think it would be easy to translate the first section very well, but "smash up the music" calls attention to music, while "sprinkle wack MC's" relates Coach Z to other people. And there is a word in French for "sawdust".

<line start="1069" end="1104" speaker="peaceyp">Je veux une tartine avec deux oeufs broulliés !</line>

Translation: "I'd like a tartine with two scrambled eggs!"
Should be: "I'd like a piece of dry toast with two scrambled eggs!"
A tartine does include toast, but it's anything but dry. Also, later on the video shows that he is eating in a place that resembles a Waffle House. A tartine would most likely not be offered there.

<line start="1105" end="1134" speaker="peaceyp">Quelques céréales, j'veux qu'elle croustillent,</line>

Translation: "Some cereal, make it extra crisp!"
Should be: "A bowl of hash browns, make it extra crisp!"
Hash browns are in no way cereal.

<line start="1172" end="1181">
    <span style="visibility:hidden"><peaceyp>Un verre de jus d'orange et une tranche de fromage !</peaceyp></span>
    <coachz>Oh, purée !</coachz>

Translation: "A glass of orange juice and a slice of cheese!"
"Oh, puree!"
Should be: "A glass of orange juice and a bowl of cheese grits!"
"Oh, dag!"
Grits are common in New Orleans, so they shouldn't be unknown in the French language. As for the "Oh, puree!" line, that is actually pretty funny, but it's taking some creative liberties that are out of place here.

<line start="1292" end="1321">
   <coachz>Ouais, tout l'monde, on continue,</coachz>

Translation: "Yes, y'all, and we continue,"
Should be: "Yes, y'all, and we don't flake,"
This word choice is not accurate in the slightest (nor does it rhyme with the French pronunciation of "R&B", but that's true for most of these lines and can't be helped).

<line start="1454" end="1482" speaker="tenerence">Retenez de trois !</line>

Translation: "Hold on to three!"
Should be: "Remainder three!"
It literally means the same thing, but has no math connotations.

<line start="1837" end="1905" speaker="coachz">Oh, ton paiement. Je pensait a une bonne part de pizza au protège-coude ?</line>

Translation: "Oh, your payment. How's about a nice slice of elbow pad pizza?"
Should be: "Oh, your payment. How's about a nice slice of chinstrap pizza?"
I would forgive this one because the idea is similar, but the video actually shows a chinstrap pizza, free of any elbow pads.

I understand the difficulty that arises in translating these toons, especially when it comes to music, but the goal is not to take out any of the humor present to begin with. Unintentionally-added humor is up for debate, but overall it should keep the spirit of the original.

...*deep breath* That is all. -- ■■   PURPLE  WRENCH   ■■ 17:10, 5 October 2014 (UTC)