Somm-1 wrote:
<OOC> The first problem I saw was that you introduced your character during the tense build up of a battle, MooKoo. Breaking the momentum of a story before a battle was not the best of calls. It would have been better to wait until after Maxwell was rescued... Or killed in the rescue attempt, as the case may yet be.
After that, I noticed that you have designed a prodigy for yourself. I agree with Ten and Zepher when they say that you made your character much too powerful. Oseph would tip the scales to party's favor so easily that conflict would be too greatly reduced to make this story worth telling. Whatever emotional issues he has about being alone won't make him any less of an overpowered character. You can give him an Achilles heel, but he's still Achilles. The proper solution would be to tone him down significantly rather than just throwing in one or two downsides.
Other than being bad for the plot, your character doesn't have a good reason for being so powerful in the first place. The result of a mixture of two races wouldn't be a better race, but a reconfigured one. The result can not be greater than the sum of its parts, and you can not get every good part of both races. You lose about as much as you gain in the process.</OOC>
<OOC Sorry for breaking in on your fun.
One thing I have to disagree with is that it is a good Plot! Read the setting and figure it out. I don't care what you say, its a good plot. I have talked it over with Sarge and he agrees.
Now, about my character being too powerful and making it no fun for the group. Who said he wanted to join your silly group anyways. Also, how long do you think he will last in this world, alone. Especially being completely vulnerable to any magic whatsoever.
Also, he isn't a merger of two races. He's just good with a Bow, Sword, and has great Endurance. Basically. That may seem like a blend of Elves and Dwarves. But if he ventured into other weaponry, would it sound like that? He's from another race, not a blend of two. And the "Common Enemy" to all people. That was a little hint.
Look, I've talked it over with Sarge and its all mashed potatoes and Gravy. I'm just going to knock his weaponry skill down just a smidgen because he is young, but he still has great Endurance. Since, that comes naturally to all Asani.
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